To-night I wished with all my heart
That you vanish forever
Father dear I saw a falling star
To-night I wished with all my heart
That you are smashed into tiny pieces
Brother dear I saw a falling star
To-night I wished with all my heart
That you rot from the inside out (to feed the insects, you see)
Sister dear I saw a falling star
(And what a marvelous sight)
To-night I wished with all my heart
That you live a thousand years before you return to dust
Ah me, did we tell ourselves that we saw a falling star?
(It streaked across the black in a slow gait -- was it even a star at all?)
To-night I wished with all my heart
That I die the most horrible death, for wishing the most vile things of people around me.
I do not deserve to live
(but I'm still here no matter how many times I wish I was not).
I don't like this game anymore.
November 29, 2009 10:00 PM
Let's hope you are here for a good purpose. Even if it is to test us with your challenging writing.
November 30, 2009 10:20 AM
The funny thing is, I wasn't that close to him. Not like my mom's parents. But I guess what freaked me out so much is that I was there in the hospital.
I'm feeling better. I wrote a letter, except I kind of feel guilty because I was going into the "anger" phase at the end... So I'm going to write another one.
December 1, 2009 8:04 PM
I like this piece of writing. Only when I wish people dead, it's to make me feel better, not guilty.
December 4, 2009 7:16 PM
This is a hard read for the passion and intensity in the poem, but still rings with truth, for sometimes the narrator does wish death on those who hurt her/him. So the poem is powerful and yet has beautiful images of stars falling. Really lovely. I guess I also liked the poem because someone told me that my writing needs anger.
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